HAIKU DENT CHOOSE BETWEEN THEM – BUT I HAVE TO!


HAIKU MONDAY ENTRIES:  TERROR

   I have now extracted the entries from which I will try and pick the winner/next host in good time for setting a new theme and gearing up for the next round.

 There is a difficult task ahead. Some I can (reluctantly) eliminate on technicalities.   Then comes the dilemma of how much cognizance to take of the visuals – many of which are incredibly good and have obviously taken much effort.

   Provisionally, I have decided that those with visuals will probably be given an edge, but that I will also look for a haiku which has impact and meaning even without illustration. This also means that it is possible for an entry without a picture to come up top, if the words do it all.

   I shall also be looking at comments here before posting my decision tomorrow. Wish me luck. Anyone got a line I can use to consult Solomon and Daniel?

czar

http://boblandedits.blogspot.com/ 

Pitch fits, refuse eats,
Melt down at worst times. Turn three
already, will ya?

Blackmailer appears
On spouse’s caller ID.
Explain? Panic? Lie.

 

Dan

http://curmudgeonscomplaint.blogspot.com/ 

Gibbering fiends prance
around your bed in the night.
Madness creeping near. 

Nerve ends raw with fear.
Cold shivers crawl up your spine.
Nothing but the cat.

 

Fishy

http://fishy2me.blogspot.com/ 

Cheap motel shower
conjures Psycho images.
Was that me? Screaming??????? 

Six pm entrance
Walk an aisle to forever?
Terror Rising Day! 

Foam

http://thefoaming.blogspot.com/ 

Heart beats rapidly.
Body tenses, mind races.
Startled, I awake…….


Rafael

http://ramblingsfrommytyper.blogspot.com/2012/03/haiku-monday-terrero.html 

Reaching Heaven’s gate
Peter’s busy pimp’n whores
Satan rules the roost 

THE Apocalypse
Mother churns a liquid heat
Nature’s milk turns cold

 

 Robin

http://lifeinqueue/ 

Why are you so late
Are those your headlights I see
Stranger in my drive

 

Roly

http://sarchasm2.wordpress.com/2012/03/14/colonialists-haiku-topic-terror/ 

My wheelchair is here
Hope it’s not human error
That’s my one terror

 

Serendipity

http://serendipitouswildmoments.wordpress.com/2012/03/16/dilla-dither/ 

Armadillo bolts,
spooked by us, to the safe cave
‘tween Dog’s pantaloons!

Serendipity

http://serendipitouswildmoments.wordpress.com/2012/03/17/holy-terror/ 

Holy Terror shoots;
bad guys fall all around her –
pleasant young lady. 

Serendipity

http://serendipitouswildmoments.wordpress.com/2012/03/18/dove-on-glass/ 

The hawk stoops swiftly.
The dove rockets in terror.
CRASH! Easy pickings.

 

Twisted Scottish Bastard

http://twistedscottishbastard.blogspot.com/ 

Terror dripping like
Moonlight pooling
around the corpse

  

68ghia

http://blogs.women24.com/68ghia 

Life round me spilling
All its demons; not thrilling,
This evil; chilling! 

Something’s between us
‘What divide?’ she wonders thus -
Just armrest; no fuss!


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24 Responses to HAIKU DENT CHOOSE BETWEEN THEM – BUT I HAVE TO!

  1. dan says:

    The host can put as many rules as they like, but the goal is to get people to participate and be friends. If it is complicated, Most people would not attempt it.

  2. dan says:

    Fortunately we are not Japanese poets. This version is called Spookyou.

  3. Tilly Bud says:

    Some good ones here!

    A technical word – these appear to be senyru, not haiku: haiku talk about nature; senryu, the nature of man.

  4. Serendipity says:

    For those of you unfamiliar with this Haiku Monday challenge, perhaps this will better help explain the background of this informal competition. This group just plays at this challenge. The contest originated with *Troll* (http://trollstroll.blogspot.com/), who did not have an entry this week, but is an acknowledged master at the form. It started as a little wordplay among friends, and a few of us outliers found it and joined. Now we have new blog-friends as a result. (Some of the rest of us amateurs often do well to get the 5-7-5 in correctly. It is not an easy form to master correctly.) I was personally drawn to the challenge of telling a coherent story with so few words available to use.

    Most of the time, the minimum requirement is a three line 5-7-5 format where the first line is 5 syllables, the second line is 7 syllables, the last line is 5 syllables. The best haiku make use of both Kigo (seasonal reference) and Kireji (cutting word or punctuation) which is explained at (http://www.haikusociety.com/learn/kireji-and-kigo) The Kigo goal is to join two separate images/emotions in one integrated verse. (There are other. longer, forms than this one.)

    You have seen some of these other elements of a haiku in some of these entries (beyond syllables). The surprise switch has been well done in a few of these. Rhyming is a concept that normally does not enter into haiku, perhaps because of its origin in Japanese, and the difference between its parent language and the strains of English we are all using here.

    For whatever that is worth, maybe it helps to better explain how Colonialist, with his penchant for wordplay, was drawn into the competition – and won! Certainly he has a way with words.

    S~

  5. 68ghia says:

    I thought these things are supposed to rhyme?
    Yours always does – or is it just to show off ;-)
    The Bastard’s one is quite scary!!
    And the Czar’s about the 2 year old – cute ;-)
    The rest – brilliant ;-)

  6. Sonel says:

    Great Haiku’s Col! Glad I’m not choosing. Good luck. :)

  7. twolips2 says:

    I have water on the brain, so I can’t decide at all.

  8. Serendipity says:

    Col,

    I believe the entry below is from Foam.

    Heart beats rapidly.
    Body tenses, mind races.
    Startled, I awake…….

    Good luck on the judging!

    S~

    • colonialist says:

      Thank you! Duly fixed in an edit, where I also put the entries in alphabetical order and reintroduced putting a vital word in italics – don’t know how it lost them.

  9. Difficult to choose… I like Roly’s and ghia’s.
    *husg*

  10. adinparadise says:

    Difficult decision you have to make, Col. Good luck. ;)

  11. melouisef says:

    You guys are just too smart for me
    but great fun to read.
    If I had to do one it would be about the terror of making a fool of myself writing haiku

    have fun :)

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