(Using an exclamation mark in such a way that one proves it was really needed there, in exactly 33 words):
EXCLAMATION IS THE WHOLE POINT!
Lounging at the lakeside, they saw a large trout breaking the surface. ‘There’s a monster,’ Ron said.
Julie looked farther* out to where some looping coils suddenly appeared, and repeated, ‘There’s a monster!’
(I can use the above as an ad for Forest Circle Quest, and the Lake Snake which appears therein? Heehee )
‘I loved this,’ does sound rather flat
With comment that one leaves;
Recipient would rather that
You emphasized what (s)he receives;
So, at the end, be sure to park
A healthy exclamation mark!
(I can’t believe it – this one came out at exactly the right number of words on the very first try!)
Though marks, exclamation, are abused,
And tend to be quite overused,
Writers, whom their use eschewed,
Left their writings rather rude
And, in appearance, nude,
From laziness – or they are not that good!
(There is definitely a different tone of voice to an exclamation, and the skilled writer keeps the right to have his characters say something flatly when they should be exclaiming, or vice versa. I know people whose whole speech is a series of exclamations – ‘I’ve just had breakfast! We had eggs!’ – and others who would say, ‘There’s a lion coming up behind you,’ in a conversational tone.)
*More accurate than poor ‘further’, which is lately expected to do both jobs.
Colonialist March 2012 (Letterdash/WordPress)