For your prompt this week, we are giving you the first 33 words of a story. You need to complete it with 33 of your own words.

“There’s nothing cute about it,” he said. The register of his voice indicated decision more so than discussion.

  She disagreed heartily and privately, staring past his head and out the window behind him. // Weekend tourists were filling the street, most looking attractive in the short shorts and skimpy tops he found so repulsive.

  “Your flock don’t wear them, though,” she commented soothingly.

  “What’s left of them!”

I am asking readers to vote. Not necessarily for mine, though, unless you truly feel it is the best!

About colonialist

Active septic geranium who plays with words writing fantasy novels and professionally editing, with notes writing classical music, and with riding a mountain bike, horses and dinghies. Recently Indie Publishing has been added to this list.
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  1. Thanks so much for linking up to Trifextra. Remember, this weekend’s entries are being judged by the Trifecta community, so I hope you were able to cast your votes. (There’s still just over two hours left if not!) Winners will be announced with the Monday post. Hope to see you back then.


  2. I commented yesterday, or I thought I did. Oh no, my comments are disappearing! It was a bit long, but basically in like that she seems to be condescending to him a bit,. It sounds like she likes to those short shorts (maybe ars them herself), but is trying to soothe his hurt feelings.


  3. karen says:

    This was a great and unexpected use of the prompt. I have a feeling I am going to be surprised a lot today. I loved the petulance that is clearly implied …


  4. Libby says:

    ooohhh – “What’s left of them.” jab, jab, jab – LOL! Nice job!


  5. I like the soothing line. She says she thinks the short shorts are attractive, as though she wears them when he’s not looking. Then has the balls to soothe him.


  6. You did express a lot in this short response. He does seem a touch judgmental and sour for his vocation, doesn’t he. His companion is very compassionate and gentle. Liked this one!


  7. I like it Col.


  8. This is a nice twist on the challenge.


  9. colonialist says:

    ‘Twixt generations, could well be. I don’t think his heart is too warm, though!


  10. Sandra says:

    I see it as a heartwarming conversation between generations. Smile.


  11. jesterqueen says:

    I really felt like this was a grandfather and granddaughter and tribe meant “generation”


  12. His ‘flock’ is no doubt dwindling. Interesting …


  13. A literary miniature. Lovely, as always, Col.


  14. barbara says:

    probably the worst place a person of the cloth could be . . . where so few wear any cloth at all. 🙂


  15. Gina says:

    He’s driven them away by his conservatism? Unanswered questions are intriguing.


  16. Sonel says:

    Wow! Well done as usual Col! Of course I am voting for you…no one else! 🙂


  17. natalie says:

    Mmmm, like this, questions, questions, questions, always good.


  18. Amanda says:

    This is a great take on the prompt! A lot of layers in there. I feel like I know these characters well.


    • colonialist says:

      Thanks! These are wonderful exercises in getting a lot of information across in fewest possible words. Amazing, when one thinks of it, how just a single word like ‘flock’can bring a whole scene into context.


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