‘Suspense’ – and relief!


The Trifextra: Week Fifty Six 

‘This weekend we are playing another type of word game with you. Below are photos from the 33rd page of one of our very favorite books, Elizabeth Strout’s Olive Kitteridge. What we want you to do is to scour the page (click to enlarge), choose 33 words, and reshape those words into a piece of your own. Your piece does not have to tell an entire story. We just want to see what you can do with this particular word bank. Punctuation is up to you. Use whatever you need, whether or not it appears in the photos.’


Kevin discovered the child hanging in the kitchen, wrapped in a pink blanket.

Was it the woman who had hung her there?

He touched her and felt, with relief, comforting signs of life. 

 © February 2013 Colonialist (WordPress)

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Active septic geranium who plays with words writing fantasy novels and professionally editing, with notes writing classical music, and with riding a mountain bike, horses and dinghies.
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26 Responses to ‘Suspense’ – and relief!

  1. I was about to freak. Thanks for the save!

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  2. adeeyoyo says:

    Nice short tale with a happy ending, Col. 🙂

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  3. Cobbie's World says:

    A nice scene built around those 33 words of yours. Well written. Could have been grisly but, is not. Thanks for that ending. Phew! 🙂

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  4. Much more positive than mine. 🙂

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  5. Lumdog says:

    Wow! You wrote an even flowing story with the limited words. Nice one.

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  6. BettyRants says:

    Oh, wow! I held my breath until the end. Well done!

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  7. barbara says:

    a happy “ending” within a dark piece. 🙂 Well done.

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  8. Draug419 says:

    This is great! And a happy ending too (:

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  9. 68ghia says:

    Wow Col!!
    such suspense with so few words – you are a master!

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  10. ouch! Thang God for signs of life!

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  11. Trifecta says:

    Wow. That’s pretty amazing. Great job.

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