Take two.  I couldn’t resist the temptation to do another Halloweensie version as one of my Really Awful Rhymes.  It was fun turning the mood around from the last line of the second stanza onwards.

 Witch Cat 4

It was the night of Halloween
The fiercest black cat ever seen,
Came strolling through the village square,
Scaring kids all gathered there.

Then they screeched in greater fear
When a witch, too, did appear,
Swooping from above, astride
Vacuum cleaner, long and wide. 

Witch oin Vacuum

‘Free rides for all,’ announced the cat;
Cackle!  I have come for that,’
Said the witch, ‘so you can see
What fun to be a witch can be!’

Cat on broom 

Brave Tommy said,  ‘I want to try!’
And soon they chased bats through the sky;
Then, waiting turns, the rest all sat
Through spooky stories from the cat. 

© Colonialist October 2013 (WordPress)

About colonialist

Active septic geranium who plays with words writing fantasy novels and professionally editing, with notes writing classical music, and with riding a mountain bike, horses and dinghies. Recently Indie Publishing has been added to this list.
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  1. Desdi says:

    Look into the history of witchy broomsticks.
    It’s quite racy.
    “Flying ointment”


  2. Ha! I’m sure my cat has lots of stories, but she just won’t tell them. Fun story!


  3. Carrie Finison says:

    Love the vacuum cleaner-riding witch. What a great image!

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  4. Laura Shovan says:

    Still cackling at the mental picture of a witch riding around on a vacuum cleaner.

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  5. I like the vacuum-riding witch. Clever!

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  6. “Really Awful Rhymes”? What’s with that? Judging by this, I’m not sure you’re capable of “really awful”! BTW, thank you for trying to comment on my WordPress account, but I don’t actually use that account. (Except to comment on other people’s WP accounts!) You can find my entry here:


  7. Great story…loved it.. 🙂


  8. laurimeyers says:

    Is the vacuum cleaner riding witch for hire? Because someone needs to sweep my floor every once in awhile!


  9. Tee hee! What fun. I don’t dare rhyme, but I’m glad others do!


  10. Love the vacuum cleaner! So fun!


  11. What fun! Love the idea of a vacuum cleaner broom!


  12. jannatwrites says:

    I’d ride a vacuum cleaner! The spooky stories the cat might tell worry me a little, though 🙂


  13. The Asian says:

    Getting hold of a flying vacuum would be pretty awesome 🙂


  14. Grannymar says:

    I think you are in the wrong business…. We all want one of those vacuum cleaner brooms!

    Nicely done!


  15. adinparadise says:

    I want one of those vacuum cleaner brooms. It would make housework so much ore fun. CACKLE!! 👿


  16. Love the vacuum cleaner! Fun entry!


  17. now if Hallowe’en could be that much fun each year! I’d be all for listening to cat stories while waiting for a ride with a witch.


  18. linda says:

    Hahahaha…..Great fun.


  19. I totally love this one,,,I guess you just can’t resist writing.:) 🙂 Lucky for us!


  20. Another Poem – don’t know how you can toss off these works of art so effortlessly !


  21. cherylsec says:

    This is great! Love the rides on the vacuum and the spooky tales from the cat. And I don’t think it’s a “really awful Halloweensie rhyme” at all. 🙂 I really enjoyed it. Nice job!


  22. nrhatch says:

    Love the vacuum cleaner broom. A vroom vroom!


  23. I can’t believe you did two. You are definitely on a roll. Fantastic!


  24. Oh wow, Col! Totally loving the witch on a vacuum cleaner idea! Very fun!! So glad you didn’t stop at one entry 🙂


  25. deborahholtwilliams says:

    I think it’s a terrific rhyme!


  26. suzicate says:

    You’re on a roll!


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