FLASH FICTION FIFTY SHORT STORY CHALLENGE: Wounded.


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Developing the challenge I proposed here: It is generally agreed that some combination of all the following elements is essential in having a good short story:

SETTING, CHARACTER, PLOT, POINT OF VIEW, CONFLICT, THEME.

In illustrating this, here is a short story I have whipped up based on the following title. I have avoided using a picture prompt, as that adds a thousand extra words and is cheating!

Wounded

The rhino was perfectly silhouetted against the acacias. Zuka took aim.

‘No you don’t,’ Vusi breathed, raising his rifle. Zuka stepped behind a trunk. Vusi cursed.

A gunshot came; deafeningly.

Zuka screamed, elbow shattered. The rhino fled.

Thandi emerged opposite, rifle smoking. ‘Told you you’d need backup,’ she smirked.

How does this story use the elements?

  • Setting: Rhino, acacias, rife, opposite, Nguni names = African bushveld, with a clearing inferred.
  • Characters: Zuka (assumed poacher) Vusi (assumed ranger) Thandi (assumed girlfriend of Vusi).
  • Plot: Foiled attempt at poaching a rhino.
  • Point of view:  Third person, limited to Vusi (the narration is confined to what he can see).
  • Conflict: Between Zuka on the one side and Vusi and Thandi on the other.
  • Theme:  Assumed anti-poaching.

My challenge is to produce another 49 words to add to a title of ‘Wounded’. Please have a try in comments!

Still, I can't resist adding one of my pictures of the sort of backdrop against which this story could take place.  A scene  at Zebra Hills, KwaZulu Natal

Still, I can’t resist adding one of my pictures of the sort of backdrop against which this story could take place. A scene showing waterbuck at Zebra Hills, KwaZulu Natal

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21 Responses to FLASH FICTION FIFTY SHORT STORY CHALLENGE: Wounded.

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  2. The Asian says:

    Toilet seat buck! 😉

    Maybe one day when I get my writing mojo back I’ll join you, for now though I’ll give it a skip.

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  3. Pingback: 50 Words Flash Fiction Challenge: Wounded | Disperser Tracks

  4. Sonel says:

    “Elbow shattered” – I loved reading that. Can’t that happen to all poachers? Great story Col and I love the photo. It’s gorgeous! 😀

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  5. adeeyoyo says:

    Excellent one, Col. Liked @Disperser’s too.

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  6. disperser says:

    Wounded
    ” No disease, no drugs.”
    “How much?” Volpe asked.
    “$200 per pint.”
    “I’ll take two,” Volpe said.

    Mary let her blood flow, filling the container to the four cups mark as the vampire hungrily watched.

    The wound in her arm was a godsend; Mary had many bills to pay.

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  7. What a great challenge. Overdue for dog walk before storm, but will try to circle back and play. Get those poachers!
    And now must get out quickly…exit stage left….

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  8. gipsika says:

    Hahaha Col – our pro-rhino partisan! I’ll be Thandi backing up Vusi. Very well written.

    Though I thought, POV related to the third-person limited, and theme to the anti-poaching?

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