Elder Daughter K and Granddaughter R just down the road from home.
‘… write a poem that includes images that engage all five senses. Try to be as concrete and exact as possible with the “feel” of what the poem invites the reader to see, smell, touch, taste and hear.’
The tickle of sea-sand between one’s toes,
The vista of sea and some ships,
The crash of the breakers and gurgle of flows,
Delicious sea-salt on one’s lips,
The odour of ozone and seaweed on shore,
The seawater’s all-over, all lover kiss,
The mews of the gulls; see them overhead soar —
What more could one long for than this?
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Very well done
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Very clever Les. I love living in the countryside, in the midst of England’s green and pleasant land, but just now and again I yearn to live by the sea. Your picture triggers that yearn. Well, a visit to the sea at any rate .
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I am shocked that you should make a child work in the salt mines.
Shame on you.
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I liked the way the images and evocation of senses made me unaware of the rhymes, which never felt forced once I turned my attention onto them.
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You took a prosaic prompt and made it into something great.
Where’s my towel and sun lotion?
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I feel very flattered. Thank you.
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I can see but not hear the beauty and majesty of the surf but, still, I’m touched to the point that I can almost taste the salt in the breeze.
Unfortunately, I don’t know how to incorporate the five senses into a sentence.
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‘…smell and taste the salt…’ ? So close!
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Like I said . . .
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