nrhatch of Spirit Lights the Way entered a lovely rhyme about a Quiggle for the In Just Spring Writing Contest of children’s author Susanna Leonard Hill, and persuaded me to try a spring entry too. I also decided to rhyme it. It was fun to meet the challenge of the topic within the limitations of no more than 350 words and ending with one of the two given lines. Of course, I had to throw the obvious pun in …
I do hope Koo gives a chance for Immy and her dragon to be looked at in USA – although the music part might come as a bit of surprise!
The Cuckoo-clock Waiting for Spring
Sadly sobbed the cuckoo-clock,
‘Fell off hook, and got a shock!
Though I’m back upon the wall,
I’m not working now, at all!’
(Anyway, that clock, for years,
Had a fault inside his gears:
All his cuckoo there could do
Was to give a cute soft, ‘Koo!’
Lots of people tried to look
For the reason for no ‘Cuck’;
Could not find where lay the blame;
Soon, then, ‘Koo’ clock’s name became.)
‘Woe is me!’ Koo’s cry went on,
‘I have stopped; my spring is gone;
I have nothing, now, to wind –
Please, my spring do try to find!’
Owl, at window, thought awhile,
Then he seemed to give a smile,
‘You must wait till winter goes;
That’s when spring is found, one knows!’
Koo said, ‘Sob, weep, wail, boo-hoo!
What can I through winter do?’
Owl suggested, ‘While you wait,
Why don’t you just hibernate?’
‘What on earth is that?’ clock cried;
‘That’s when you,’ the bird replied,
‘Like the bears and hedgehogs do,
Sleep the whole of winter through.’
So Koo slept, until at last,
That long winter had all passed;
Blossoms bloomed, and weather warmed;
Buds came budding; swallows swarmed.
Though the signs all seemed to say
Winter had now gone away,
Still on wall see poor Koo mope,
Silently, and losing hope.
But some mice, who lived below
In a hole which didn’t show,
Said, ‘Our home’s a dirty scene –
Time to do a big spring-clean!’
Thus, they swept out with a will;
Cleaned and dusted there, until,
With surprise, one mouse soon found
Some strange thing all coiled around.
‘That’s my spring!’ hear clock shout out,
For it was, without a doubt!
Then said mouse, ‘What’s this I feel?
Seems to be a little wheel!’
And it was not long before
Both parts, left out on the floor,
Were put back inside of Koo
By a man who, how to, knew.
Seeing leaves and blooms grow fast;
Ticks and tocks back at full blast;
Shouting ‘Cuckoo!’ as in past,
Koo knew spring was here at last!
© Colonialist March 2013 (WordPress)
LOVE it!
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Must admit I thought it was one of my best things lately!
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I love the double meaning of “spring”…well done!
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Thanks! – I would have liked to have got the third one in, too, but that would have been pushing it! 🙂
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Cute! “Koo!”
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Just fourteen illustrations, and we Koo-ed have a picture book! 🙂
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To me, the best kids books are those that close with a demand issued, “Again!” Especially when, as an adult, I am happy to flip back to page one and comply. 😀
I think this story meets both criteria. Glad you entered it!
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I feel yours did, too, and I must admit to a little surprise and disappointment that both didn’t rate better on the judging. A trifle too ‘different’, perhaps?
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LOVED everything about this story! 🙂
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And I love the fact you loved it! 🙂
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Nice poem!
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I am pleased you think so!
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what a cute story 🙂 I love Cuckoo clocks too 🙂 Great job!
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I am glad it has had such a kind response from you and all the other great writers in this field who have been involved!
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So cute! I am so glad that the Cuckoo clock was fixed!!
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Hope had to spring eternal to good effect!
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So glad to hear that on the ground
Koo’s missing spring by you was found! 🙂
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And you acknowledge I’m quite bright
For way in which I put it right? 🙂
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Outstanding! I’m really in awe. I make puns all the time…but only by accident! If I try to be clever it falls flat! I admire your ability and this was a particularly fun piece! 🙂
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So glad that reading it gave you fun. I chase puns all the time, chaste or otherwise, so I’m bound to catch quite a few!
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What a clever and witty rhyme! A great read.
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I must admit to being pleased with the way it turned out. Thanks!
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Great poem! Love the cuckoo clock character! What a great idea!!!
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Kind, indeed, of you to say so!
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This was quite wonderful indeed. You deserve an ice cream sundae with ‘springles’ on top!
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Oooooh! Yes, please! 🙂
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Loved the rhyme, happy ending and play on words. Very creative and entertaining 🙂
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So glad you enjoyed it!
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Absolutely brilliant. I think you should put all these clever poems in a collection and publish them. It would be a wonderful way to entertain children and also teach them that the same word can mean many different things in English.
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Thanks – I am flattered. There has, in fact, been some discussion on a collection being published.
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So cute and so original and so creative. I loved the double meaning for spring…nicely done! I have two cuckoo clocks and I love them!
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Thanks!
I do so wish I still had a cuckoo-clock, but after ours fell off the wall it was a goner.
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Great rhythm and a super solution. Good luck!
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Thanks, indeed!
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absolutely wonderful 🙂
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Why, thank you!
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I love your poem. So very clever, oiriginal and fun! Liked your rhyming.
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Much appreciate your saying so!
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I love your poem. So very clever, oiriginal and fun!
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Thanks for the lovely comment!
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Wonderful poem! What a great entry for Susanna’s Spring Contest! I love your wordplay.:) And I’m sorry about your cuckoo clock.
I had a collection of teapots that my husband built a shelf for. After arranging them, he decided one of the screws needed to be tightened. Getting up from under the shelf, he upended the whole thing and the little teapots slid to the floor. 😦
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Thanks!
I’m sure that was another occasion for fervent utterance of the certain word …
And, I don’t mean, ‘Oh, bother!’
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🙂 Yes, you are probably right…although I think it was a turning point in my perception of life. I had never been a ‘material girl’ type of person…but when that happened I realized that I really didn’t care about ‘things’…just people.:) And yes, I am still married to the guy who built the shelf…46 years this coming August.:)
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Hmm… Yes, it would seem you forgave him!
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🙂
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So fun to use the double meaning of spring!
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I should have sought a way to bring in the third meaning!
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Well done! My grandmother owned a cuckoo clock that I loved as a kid. This brought back good memories. They don’t seem to make cuckoo clocks anymore. What happened?!
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The Swiss do still produce them, and there is a selection in our local Jewellery Store. Some, I think, are driven by batteries rather than the traditional spring.
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Cute 😉
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I am? Er, oh, of course I am!
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I loved it! Such a wonderful, poetic play on words!
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You are extremely kind!
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Hurrah for the Cuckoo, for he brought spring to us! 😀
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And for the mice, who brought spring to him! 🙂
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Literary genius as usual 🙂
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Roll over, Shakespeare! 🙂
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Such delightful poem! I’m glad all ended well for Cuckoo! 😉
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Oops, missed an “a” between “Such” and “delightful”…
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Glad you enjoyed it, and isn’t it infuriating that one can’t edit one’s own comments!
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Even English is my second language I really enjoyed your play with words. Lovely poem – long but really lovely, Thank you so much 🙂
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Thanks for your charming comment. I actually found that I had to cut the poem shorter than it was when I wrote it, because it became TOO long. A poor sparrow got left out of the story.
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Awww poor sparrow.. then you have to make something special for that little fellow.. I love sparrows 🙂 thanks again mr. colonialist
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He only had a bit part as a go-between twixt clock and owl. I’ll have to give him a leading role in another:
Maybe a story about a sparrow,
Who strayed away from the straight and narrow …
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oh a naughty sparrow?.. thihi.. no he don’t have to be naughty.. he just steal here and there … I assume .. Thanks
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🙂
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Oh btw… I assume you haven’t been visiting my “writing” place? http://www.starhouse.nl/star6/ – something to read if you like to 😀
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I hope I got to the right post?
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You got the right post… Thanks I wished it was happen somewhere else. Here in Denmark they actually accuse the innocent person.. after a year or two I was at the angry stage and then it was too late… but oh well. I am the one today that is the best and I know… the company been sold and a lot of people fired and those engineers didn’t get a new job… Well I have to look at it at the bright side and I am now a free person and self-employed and no one to answer for …that is my force now 🙂
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I love a happy ending!
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Love that spring ‘returned’ with a spring! Fun, bouncy and…familiar – costs a lot to have an expert repair a fallen clock!
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You have been there? 🙂
I once had a cuckoo-clock stop working, and I spent weeks of a labour of love in fixing it myself. Proudly, I put it back on its hook – which pulled out of the wall and little bits of clock were scattered over a wide area. I said a word I never normally use.
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What a fun, rollicking story! Great rhythm (just like a clock :)) and I love the double meaning of spring used here. Perfect that the spring-cleaning mice were the ones to find the missing spring. Thanks for a delightful entry!!
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Thanks!
As you have noticed, I love playing with words and layering meanings!
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Very clever as usual 🙂
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Thanks – quite long, this one. At first I thought I might have to pad it to get to near 350 words, but eventually I had to prune it!
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And they all lived happily ever after (is all I can say)
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One hopes so, anyway. 🙂
Did you note I brought in a new Footloose illustration? It belongs to a book on the drawing board – er, writing pad!
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I have been very unobservant lately 😦
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To be able to sit and pound out a meaningful poem like that on a subject amazes me… I stand in awe of the ability you have..
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Actually, as with so many things, all it takes is lots of practice – but thanks!
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Cannot get into spring mood now
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You are a silly nana!
(Just being helpful: thought an insult might wind you up!) 🙂
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Fantastic, Col! Coo found his spring in Spring . . . how spring-chronistic! 😀
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Aaaargh! (Actually, that is a lovely double-edged pun!) 🙂
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Brilliant. You really do think on a different plain to the rest of us mere mortals
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The first bit is too kind. Is the second bit saying I’m plane crazy? 🙂
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And then there is no fun* ,
We are heading into autumn,
With winter knocking on the door
I will have one heater and more.
(pronounced like in …tumn)
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No fumn at all! 🙂
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