A Valiant Attempt; Really Awful Terzanelle and Jane.

1500 meter trial

Still-only-six-year-old R made a brave try at the 1500 metre swimming trial today in cold and rainy weather.  The distance was no problem to her, but she just can’t summon up enough speed yet to do it inside the required 40 minutes.  Still, her time for the 800 metres was considerably faster than last year, and we were really proud of her attempt.

After doing that swim, she still had the stamina to swim a few more lengths and do the various strokes and tumble turns needed for her Silver Badge.

And, she has officially been selected for her school’s swimming team!  The bad news on that one is getting her to three practices a week.

The NaPoWriMo Day 16 prompt is truly sadistic – a terzanelle.  This follows this rhyme scheme:


where the upper case shows repeated lines and the lower case rhyming ones.  Being constrained by having the last two lines as re-used ones is quite a challenge. 

I have taken the form seriously.  The subject matter?

Perhaps far less,
For, as you see,
I’m into serious

Terzanelle and Jane

Terzanelle came to replace
The Jane that used to be there –
She left Tarzan in disgrace. 

Sick of jungle life to share,
Monkey business she just left,
The Jane that used to be there. 

Leaving Tarzan quite bereft
Jane departed at great speed –
Monkey business she just left. 

Tell the truth, she’d taken heed
Tarzan chats up Terzanelle –
Jane departed at great speed. 

Now that Jane’s departed, well
Nothing else for him to do –
Tarzan chats up Terzanelle. 

Terazanelle has buzzed off, too,
He sobs, tears running down his face;
Nothing else for him to do –
She left Tarzan in disgrace.

© Colonialist April 2015 (WordPress)

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Active septic geranium who plays with words writing fantasy novels and professionally editing, with notes writing classical music, and with riding a mountain bike, horses and dinghies. Recently Indie Publishing has been added to this list.
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14 Responses to A Valiant Attempt; Really Awful Terzanelle and Jane.

  1. The Asian says:

    I’m sure R will get it next time. Being selected for the school team is also great though.
    As for your poem, I have no idea how you manage to come up with things like that. It’s literary genius 🙂


  2. Congratulations to your R swimming star!! I remember when you showed pics of her when she first started learning to swim. She’s really come a long way since then. 🙂 So happy that Tarzan got his just desserts.


  3. bulldog says:

    1500 m at 6 years old… very very brave… I have trouble doing that these days… just seems an edge too far… well done to her though…


  4. Well done that girl.

    You must admit that a terzanelle is an economical form, with the repeated lines to save labout!


  5. cobbies69 says:

    40 minutes wow that is some speed. better than me, I cant even swim scared of water 😉 🙂


  6. Bravo! This truly is superb! Made me smile, as always.

    P.S. Thank you for pointing out my [now fixed] mistake.

    Liked by 1 person

  7. Patrecia (with an E) says:

    Well done Miss R, you did your best and even though you did not win , you are a winner nevertheless because you did do your best. Congrats on Silver Medal…one day we shall see you at the Olympics


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