A Really Awful Limited View


The NaPoWriMo suggestion for today:

I’ve looked through window at the view,
And noted nouns and colours: Check!
The trees are green, the pool is blue –
With lots of fleck, but what the heck. 

Most houses are quite light, all right,
Though some do seem a sort of cream,
To call them white would make it trite:
That would, I deem, cause lost esteem. 

Their tops are mainly tiled in red,
Alas, alack, one’s done in black;
In garden bed, it must be said,
There is, of blooms, a sorry lack. 

I could find more for this sad score,
A lot of stuff would show, I know,
By getting up before I saw …
Such effort, though, is a no-go!

To get this view I would have needed to rise and take steps before I succeeded!

To get to this view I just would have needed
to rise and take steps before I succeeded!

Colonialist March 2014 (WordPress)
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About colonialist

Active septic geranium who plays with words writing fantasy novels and professionally editing, with notes writing classical music, and with riding a mountain bike, horses and dinghies.
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20 Responses to A Really Awful Limited View

  1. MoreThanACat says:

    The view might be limited in terms of sight but it clearly (bugger!) didn’t limit your imagination 🙂

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  2. nrhatch says:

    Enjoyed your rhythm and your rhyme.
    Hope your find the right house in time.

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  3. Pussycat44 says:

    House-hunting in rhyme??

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  4. Rhyme and reason, you’re spoiling us!

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  5. A chuckle filled read I enjoyed. Thank you

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  6. misswhiplash says:

    The description is extremely clear
    what you seek is very near.
    other houses, roof of black
    shows a definite class thats lack.
    must mean that it gets very hot
    because the sun likes black a lot
    no flowers in the garden grow
    no colour where the seeds not sown
    I, d rather have some grass of green
    and water just to set the scene
    but I thought you bit of prose
    with such beauty as a rose
    so thank you once again my friend
    now this really is the end

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